I feel nothing for the main characters.
They don’t express their feelings at all.
Which = I don’t care what happens to them.
I won’t finish the book. I can’t.
A story could be riddled with grammatical errors, there could be an obvious plot hole—but if I care about your characters I WILL stick it out to the end. Make me FEEL something. Give me someone to root for.
So as a writer, maybe you’re asking, how do I do that?
Know your characters. Know them inside and out. What makes them tick, what makes them who they are. Their favorite color and what food they are allergic to. The reader will probably never know these things. But you will and as the quote above says, it WILL come through in your writing.
I’ve probably touched on this subject a time or two, but after coming across book after book with the same issues, I feel like I need to say it again.
MAKE ME FEEL, DAMMIT!
When you’re writing, and you don’t feel, chances are your readers won’t either.
There are scenes in my last 3 books where I was crying as I wrote. I can only hope that those feelings translated onto paper, but at least it’s a start. I’ve had scenes I wrote that made me laugh. I’ve had scenes where I was so mad I had to get up and pace the room. Not saying I’m perfect, but I hope you feel something when you read my books. That’s the entire reason I write and read.
I can overlook a lot of issues as long as you make me feel.
Love and happy reading/writing!